Sisters Unite
Once there were three young girls: Ella, Kate, and Lee. They were from a rich family. Their dad was a lawyer, and their mom was the district attorney. Not only were they rich, but their parents didn't spend a lot of time with them due to their jobs. So at age sixteen, they were all very used to doing whatever they wanted and whenever they wanted. Unfortunately, they weren't intelligent. They went to school but spent most of the hours on their phones, never paying much attention to the teachers. The only special thing about the sisters was that each had her own special talent. read more...
Hunt or Be Hunted
The king and his servants go out one morning, venturing into the woods. Guns in hand, the king was ready to catch a good bird. He always loved the sport of hunting. He had a room filled with taxidermy. He was so proud of everything he had hunted and shot down. In reality, most of his servants that went on his hunting trips were really the ones who shot and killed everything. But of course, being the king, credit was due to him. read more...
The unforeseeable foggy future
On a rainy day in Brownmote Village, there were three vicious witches stirring up trouble. The first sister, Meg, was the brightest, but she never knew when to stop talking; the middle sister, Patty, always messed up the easiest spells, even turning her own dress into a pumpkin one time; the youngest sister, Serena, was by far the prettiest of them all, which isn’t saying much, and she was also the nicest of them all. read more...
A Series of a Child of Ill Luck
There was a daughter borne to two beautiful actors. They had a scary birth, but overall they thought they had bore a healthy child. But when she was born, the doctor told them that she was a child of ill luck. At first they were scared, but then they remembered that it was just an old myth from Chinese culture. And it made sense because their doctor was Chinese. But they decided to ignore the doctor and continue on with life. read more...
Fortunate Findings
Once there was a poor, poor village just outside the kingdom’s reach, and every morning Baker Paolo would put out a basket of burnt bread for the children to grab on their way to school. The children would take what they needed to fill the rest of their stomachs, never taking more than was filling, for they knew other children might come along who also needed it. The baker always looked forward to seeing the children's smiling faces in the morning, knowing he was at least putting some joy in the children's lives. read more...
I really enjoyed reading this story! Your imagery and description of the characters was very vivid and I could really feel the poor children’s plight through your writing. I thought the juxtaposition of the rich kingdom and the poor village was great and how no matter what the environment there will always be people less fortunate than you that you can help. I also loved your repetition of “pitter patter” to mimic the repetition of Sam’s days and how nothing in the village or kingdom every really changed. I thought that was really clever! Your use of dialogue made the characters seem more real and gave the story more complexity. I liked the kind of magical twist with the unexplained pain Sam felt when he tried to take more bread than he needed; it just drove the moral of the story home even more. You accomplished so much in this short story and it is very well written. I am looking forward to reading more of your stories!
ReplyDeleteWow, the Child of Ill Luck was a fascinating read! You did a great job in how you told the story, it was very unique and easy to follow. It caught me off guard when you mentioned whether we wanted to continue the story or not, though that may have added to the story in a humorous way. I'd still like to know why you chose to do that. It was also such an abrupt ending that I'd hoped that there would have been a tad more to how she was going to die. Or rather than keeping the original of her dying, what would happen if she remained alive and cured of not only the cancer but of the ill luck as well? That would be such an interesting concept. It saddened me to read that her mother died along with her. I was curious as to why you chose her not to die alone as well and maybe showcase how the husband or even the father felt because of the wife dying as well. You did very well overall! I enjoyed it in a cynical way! haha
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